Screenwriting
I'm looking for feedback on my original screenplay. It is a sixty-second-ish long trailer for a Christmas-themed horror movie. This is an update on [my screenplay idea I posted on lemmy a couple years back](https://lemmy.ml/post/70963). (lemmy.ml link because I still haven't learned how to link to posts cross-instance, doesn't seem to be in the docs.) --- Open with a scene of a man alone chopping wood on a snowy day. He is large-bodied and looks visually menacing, it should be clear that he is the villian. He sings an eerie and discomforting tune: "Da Da Da Da Da Da Da" The next thirty or whatever seconds build up a horror movie featuring the aforementioned villain and a hero named John, a boy around 17 years old, as well as a couple friends around the same age who support him. A couple times cut back to the opening woodchopping "Da Da Da Da Da Da Da" scene. Nearing the end of the trailer, scene with John and his couple friends walking through the city on a snowy day. The townsfolk jeer and yell obscenities at them. John narrates: "Before the incident, we were treated just like anyone else. But now, whenever we go out, the people always shout." (words flash on the screen, large font) **JOHN** Very brief scene of a terrified scream **JACOB** *chop* "Da Da Da Da Da Da Da" **JINGLEHEIMER** Frantic sprinting through a snow-covered forest **SCHMIDT** Scene of John in an attic, which is illuminated only by the candle he holds in one hand. With the other hand, John lifts up and examines a dusty old photo of the villain. "Oh my God. His name is my name too." Candle blows out. (smaller font) PREMIERES CHRISTMAS EVE
cross-posted from: https://kbin.social/m/moviesandtv@lemmy.film/t/214936 > This is a devastating account of what it's really like to be a Hollywood screenwriter. You can be a Cambridge graduate, an award winner, and the creator of a TV series on Hulu - and still work as a caterer and depend on welfare to make ends meet. > > This situation is not unique to Hollywood. Here's another expose about how the writer of the Broadway musical Head Over Heels was similarly taken advantage of: [https://www.gtmusical.com/](https://www.gtmusical.com/)
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The second in a series of weekly sessions; this one is titled “Fear, Failure, and Fucking Up”.
David is a researcher in a lab. He is generally told only what is needed to focus on his tasks. He eventually realizes he is working to make a virus more infectious. One day he meets a girl in a bar who happens to work for the same company but in a different lab location. She is studying what makes a virus more deadly to targeted populations. They soon realize they are working on developing a bioweapon. David has a family and is very dependent on this job. He is afraid of what is going to happen but also afraid of what will happen to him if he speaks out in China where he lives. He comes up with an idea to poke a hole in the safety equipment of his boss. After he catches it and spreads it, it will blow the lid off what they are doing, minimize the damage, and not bring a big risk to himself. So he thought.. He did not realize what would happen next.
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Title: Gateway of the Sun by Michael J. DeRosa Genre: Live Action/Dramedy Pitch: Young Indiana Jones meets Stargate meets Bill & Ted Logline: Three teens accidentally energize a Stone Age megalith teleportation network. Gateway of the Sun is an eight-episode one-hour action-dramedy A truly global adventure (Now a spec screenplay, published novel, and graphic novel.) Contact: Mike DeRosa at: mdsungate@gmail.com